Last month I posted a list of a few of the common pitfalls that picture book writers can fall into, (Picture Book Foibles, Oct 22, 2014) gleaned from my own experience and what I’ve read and learned from editors and agents at conferences. On the list was “Description of elements that can be illustrated instead.”
In response to that item, my friend author Mary Bowman-Kruhm asked for general guidelines. She said in a comment to the post, “Since a writer is seldom in contact with an illustrator, it’s difficult to know the parameters of what to include, what the illustrator will do. And obviously some illustrators are better at teasing out important tidbits of content than others.” So I thought I’d expand on that issue in today’s post.
To start with, as a general rule picture book text need to be very spare; each word has to be well-chosen and absolutely necessary to the story. Therefore, if the writer includes visual details that could be illustrated, those words are superfluous and perhaps should be eliminated. For example, in my book Fine Life For A Country Mouse, the full page climax of the story is of a cat leaping onto a table, knocking dishes and food in all directions and causing Tillie mouse to run for her life. My manuscript and dummy included one word on the page, “CAT!” But my wise editor Bonnie Bader knew it was not needed, and cut it. This illustration required no words. The cat is mentioned in the following page’s text describing the chase. Such a wordless page can be indicated in a manuscript by the use of illustration notes. These notes are to the editor and the illustrator; they are included in the manuscript within double parentheses, which indicate “do not set.” However, writers should use illustration notes sparingly, according to what I have heard from industry professionals.
From KidLit.com by Mary Kole, freelance editor and former literary agent:
“The point of an illustration note isn’t to jot down every single thing that’s in your imagination. It’s also not to micromanage the potential illustrator. The point of an illustration note is to convey something to the manuscript reader that is not obvious from the text.
Only use illustration notes in your picture book manuscript if there is something integral to the plot that you want the illustrations to convey, but it’s not described or alluded to anywhere in the text. In other words, if I will be blind to something from just reading the text, use an illustration note to describe it, but really do keep them simple, spare, and few in number. The average picture book text will only need one or two, tops… ”
From The Purple Crayon by Harold Underdown, children’s book editor and creator of the site about how to publish a children’s book:
“Publishers generally do not expect or need illustration notes or suggestions to accompany a picture book manuscript. Editors are used to working with these manuscripts in unillustrated form, and can visualize how they would be illustrated, and the book laid out, without any help from the author. In fact, since they are used to working with such manuscripts, they are likely to be better able to visualize a given manuscript than that manuscript’s author.
Any illustrator who may be assigned a manuscript will also be able to think about it visually. Authors and illustrators bring different skills to a picture book, and just as a writer does not need writing suggestions from an illustrator, an illustrator does not need illustration suggestions from a writer. Above all, the illustrator does not need descriptions of a setting or a person; though the author may imagine them one way, it is the illustrator’s job to bring them to life. The result can be both surprising and pleasing to the author, as the illustrator takes the illustrations beyond what the writer had been able to imagine.”
As an author/illustrator, I usually don’t need to use illustration notes on my manuscripts because I submit dummies, but I do have to be careful to avoid including words in my text that can be illustrated instead. I’d be happy to hear your thoughts and experiences on this issue!